What do you think of this poem?actually it's my first..the title is "A Serpent's Labyrinth"?

Question

wandering through d ruins of d past

hope is gone,nothing left even a dust

tears fell as I gaze upon d grey skies

had enough 2 roll another dice

nver thought dis wil hurt me so much

should I suffer 4 giving all my trust?

so u betrayed me,as u always did

feed me more apathy,den watch me bleed

d words we whispered in d ears of d lords

just lingered at d walls of dark corridors

i've searched 4 a bag of love & conscience

but I got enslaved behind ur cold fences

playing blind 2 those s***s you put me through

scenes of vituperation 4 me's not new

i've let my neck strangled & learned how 2 take

yet in d end,u're d 1 who turned 2 snake

now,unwrap me from ur cruel fingers

who anguish souls 4 its own desires

let me go out of dis mist-filled labyrinth

so dat I will learn again how 2 breathe

worse than a traitor who slew it's own brethren

dis foolishness shall meet its fateful end

now, as this tears keep drowning me in despair

tormented,blindfolded,I seek d open air

Answer 1

I love it. Bloody brilliant! So evocative and the imagery? Wow! Wonderful work...thank you for sharing!

Answer 2

To be honest, I found it difficult to read...abbreviations spoil the metre... no one will bother to read if they have to keep translating what they are reading.  From what I did persevere with, you do have some deep thoughts, but need to write in a manner that encourages others to read. Keep trying...