What do you think of this short simple poem?

Question

You don't know her,

But shes that troubled teen,

Somewhere lost in shattered dreams,

She cuts inside,

But doesn't feel the pain,

Her one last tear,

Is her shattered dream.

It's something I wrote long long long ago when I was really depressed and felt completely lost. Anyways it's short and simple ... what do u think?

Answer 1

Its very good i hope you publish it.Very nice.It expresses a lot.Good luck

Answer 2

Well as a poem it's well, o.k. at best, however as a reflection of a thought's of mind it is fantastic, fanatical and true at the same time, well done.

Answer 3

lovely poem..i enjoyed it a lot..at ur cost

Answer 4

From what I read she is indeed troubled

because of depression

She doesn't feel the pain, because keeping

things bottled up inside.

Others will feel the pain if she is gone.

People ( family and friends ) will feel guilty

for not helping her sooner.

Going through these feelings makes one helpless

hopeless

Answer 5

I like it, good meaning and the last 2 lines are great. keep writing.

Answer 6

I've a couple of note books filled with many of the same emotions.  The good thing about all of them, is that we're still around to tell people about.  Isn't it great to be able to come out of the other side of the long, dark tunnel?  Keep writing.

Answer 7

I like it, nice emotional poem.

Answer 8

absolutely great. reminds me of what i used to write

Answer 9

I think it so good. It is

Answer 10

i dont like the she cuts inside part but it's good!

do you like mine!?

plz read! TY

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Answer 11

It sounds sad.

Answer 12

O_O

I wish I was your friend when you felt like that and we would've been able to talk about it. It's so sad how life does that to people sometimes.

Read my poem?

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Answer 13

rather cliche at the beginning, but it gets to the point.. I like that it is very much full of emotion. I can relate to this poem, and that is what makes any poem good.

Answer 14

very nice!!!

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