What do you think of this story ? what can i do to make it better . its for preschool kids.?

Question

once upon a time there was a rabbit by the name of peter . peter was a bushy tail rabbit.(this is when i put on my rabbit ears and and tail and shake my tail ). peter was very hungry but was tired of eating carrots . he thought to himself where is my grandma great big book of recipes he searched until he found the great big book of recipes.(this is where i pick up a great big book.. he flipped through the pages until he found his grandma recipe for chocolate chip cookies. Than he thought to himself i wish i had someone to help me.(this is when i ask the children will they help peter make some cookie .first ill ask the children what is some things you think we will need to make cookies. than ill say lets look into the great big book of recipes and see(the first thing we have to do is read the ingredients . (the ingredients will be in words and pic. like for two cups of flour i will have the number two and two pic of cups and a pic of flour and the words at the bottom. first the ingred

Answer 1

Add more details on the Rabbits apperance, maybe bring a stuffed one. Also choose a healthier choice such as Carrot soup.

Answer 2

Sounds Great to me!

Answer 3

I think that's a great idea. Unknowingly the learn how to make cookies. You might want to print the recipe for them and make it homework so that way their parents could have some fun with their kids.

Answer 4

Maybe more details like where he looked. And instead of asking what they think goes in the cookies, ask if they think certain things go in the cookies. Make some silly and some logical. It's a good idea to keep them involved. Make sure there are pictures, too. That will help them stay interested.

Answer 5

great story , i can see you put a lot of thought into it.

the preschoolers will love it .   well done.

Answer 6

use smaller words and make sure they are understanding what you are saying

Answer 7

I think it's a cute idea.  There's a huge trend now towards nutritional education.  You may want to work something like that into your presentation.  Carrots are good for you- cookies are a fun treat but not very good for you.  What about making some simple muffins (raisin bran or banana or something).  Or some other healthier snack?  You could say he wanted a special treat instead of being hungry.  Because when we're hungry, we don't want to eat cookies but something that's good for us.  Or that he wanted to make a special treat for someone else.  These are my suggestions, only my opinion, and I don't think there's anything wrong as it is.  (I thought this might be something to consider.)  Best wishes!