What do you think of this storyline?

Question

was just thinking one day. I love to write and I ned a hobby so I was brainstorming on ideas.

15 year old girl lives in Pennsylvania. She's goth/wears a lot of black and listens to heavy music. she gets in trouble a lot so her parents send her to a discipline camp in WV where there is a military base nearby

when she goes to the camp, she meets these 2 brothers. they are really daring one was in Juvie and the other one is kinda shy about his past history. the 3 of them sneak out and get into trouble as they try to surive this discipline camp.

The girl starts to fall in love with the 1 from Juvie.

this causes turmoil with the other brother, because he likes the girl.

The 3 steal guns from the military base and kill all those in the camp, then ending with only the 1 brother from Juvie surviving.

Twisted, I know. comments? remarks?

Answer 1

I guess it would  depend on what finally drove them to kill everyone.  You'll need to make sure that part is convincing. ^^

Answer 2

its great

Answer 3

You're right--it's twisted. Are you aiming to write this for teens? (What I've gathered from the 15 year old character?) If so, aim for older teens; it might be too "twisted" for 13 and younger. (That is, thinking about the 13 year olds I know.) Otherwise, it sounds like an exciting plot and I shall be looking for it in the bookstores. (That is, assuming it is clean, because I refuse to read content with inappropriate words or elements--no offense of course, just saying.) (And yes, I know I used a lot of parenthesis.)