What do you think of this trigee?

Question

Soft sand…………………………………… Like time,

Slowly sifts…………………………………. Through the ages,

Between my………………………………… Dreams and reality,

Throbbing toes……………………………… Eventually stops.

Answer 1

This trigee commands attention with a deep drill sergeant bellow. True beauty encapsulated in a few words. Picture perfect, all three.

Answer 2

That is awesome. I have never heard of a trigee........but very cool

Answer 3

You done well here!  Especially got a chuckle out of the combined one.  My compliments.

Answer 4

Interesting ++

Answer 5

I`ve never heard of it before, sounds good.

Answer 6

Wow. I have written a couple of trigees, but I have never seen so much expressed in such few words. You got to the point without a big to-do, and I like it that way. Sometimes words can congest poems, but it seems you don't need to worry about that. Overall, I love this trigee. 9.3/10!

Hope I helped, and please keep writing!

Answer 7

This one is very good. Three solid poems. I have not worked on a Trigee for a while. I'm trying to think of a surprise ending.