What do you think of what I wrote?

Question

I just opened my diary from when I was in 6th grade and I'm more of a blog writer in my opinion, but never too good at lyrics and I found this, and I was actually very impressed. It's probably alright for most people, but I don't know. I think it's good! lol so, I probably will finish it since I have a beginning. What do you think?

These beautiful particles of the sun,

memories of the ones you've done,

simple things that bring to the eye,

happiness and joy that would never lie.

Errrm.. be honest, but not too harsh.

Appreciate it!

Answer 1

simple and unique! although there is a line there that i dont actually understand...

anyway what were thinking or your inspiration when you wrote this?

pretty!

Answer 2

****!! wow tis very good. keep going. continue like that and you got a high paying carrer going for you

Answer 3

Very simple, but still says a lot !

Haha, well-done sixth grade Cassandra !

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Answer 4

Particles of the sun? Memories of the 'ones' I've done?

Is this some sort of sick joke on the expense of the literate?

Answer 5

Personally, I like it. I especially like the first line; it brings a good mental image to mind. Anyway, you should see some of my poetry - it's horrendous. So this is pretty good. Plus, I get it and I don't usually understand poems.

Answer 6

That was so beautiful, you should write more, you have a natural talent for writing.

Answer 7

It is simple but I love it :) Thumbs up!

Answer 8

You would have been around 12 years old at the time?. Pretty smart kid. We need more kids who think like that.

Thumbs up

Cheers