What do you think???????????????

Question

nothing

the cold black river,

is the blood that runs through my veins.

liquid drips on the surface,

it outlines my heart.

it shatters the miror,

reflecting nothing.

life is nothing but a tear drop

it will soon vanish!

Answer 1

I think it is a poem trying to hard to be so dark and dooming. I think you need to clean it up if it is too sound more poetic. At this form it just sounds like a teenager venting about how much it sucks to be a teen. I wouldn't stop writing, just dig a little deeper, because it sounds alot like most dark poems on this site

Answer 2

Nice lol.

Answer 3

     Very good, but a bit depressing.  Try something a bit more cheerful

Good luck

Mike B