What do you tihnk of my poem. sliightly revised?

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flying down the path, wind in my hair

Maybe, by chance my troubles will be gone with the wind

Passing people as I go, each one a blur.

Not slowing down, I need to be here, get there.

I glance to the side, see a withering rose

If only I could stop, take a whiff before it is gone

But life is calling.

tell me what you think, what pops into your head, tell me well anything! thank you

Answer 1

i like it

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does it have a title?

rate my picture?

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Answer 2

ya its good

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Answer 3

It sounds like your running away from your problems and not stopping to smell the roses and meet new people.Have you ever submitted a poem to poetry.com it is really neat.

Answer 4

great i love the metaphors and the descriptions are

very specific