What does the poetry world think of my piece?

Question

Within me

I found it within me to place my soul in incarceration for the sake of sanity…confusion…perplexities….puzzle pieces lost…puzzle pieces found….my puzzle pieces…

I found it within me to muster up wings temporarily and soar above clouds to attempt and maybe not succeed…to view the problems we as individuals perceive as difficult, in a higher beyond the clouds way…I saw problems…we see problems…above clouds we see dots…merely dots…that are undeniably little pieces in higher plains…just dots

I found it within me to deny the existence of passion in my heart….to deny love…undeniably love is not a deniable piece of me…but I found it within me to nevertheless deny it….its universal aspect encompasses every being….does not necessarily correlate the presence of it in every heart…definitely not yours…definitely not towards mine

I found it within me to accept…to hate….to love….to feel…to fall…and nevertheless to rise….my peaks…my caves….my valleys….my mountain….found it within me…

Answer 1

It might be a good poem, but it looks like a paragraph, which scares me to read it all of it :-P.

Answer 2

Wow she must have some kind of girl to inspire to write a piece like this!!

Yes there are those people out there that can truly bring out the best, examine who and what you think you are!  Then there are, and so very thankful for it, people like you that can turn a relationship that failed into a positive soul searching experience!  Bravo --- continue on !!! Cheers !!!

Answer 3

This might qualify as a prose poem of sorts but I don't think your experience is that unique... and that is the problem.

Answer 4

I like what you say, but I think it is too wordy . . . I like a poem to whittle away life to its essences.  This reminds me almost of a journal entry . ..