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What is a good closing in a personal essay? Also how does mine sound?

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Hello. My name is . I am a member of the . I am twenty one years old. I have a four year old son, who will be starting his second year in head start this fall. I am currently enrolled in the associate of arts program here at the Turtle Mountain Community College and plan to pursue a degree is business management after the completion of my associate of arts degree. I recently left a job to pursue my dream of getting my college degree. As a young mother I have had many obstacles in my path towards my degree, with having to work full time to support my family, and taking care of our home, but I feel I have overcome those obstacles and can finally give my son the best life that he deserves. He is my inspiration for everything that I do. Ever since I was as young as my son I knew that someday I wanted to work in a hospital. Some day I hope to work at the hospital in my communityand help people in need, Even if it is just raising awareness on STD’s, and other dangerous behaviors. If I could help change one child’s life for the better it will be worth it. With the loss of my income it will be difficult to go to school and support a family with bills, the cost of gas prices continuing to rise, and clothing, shelter, and food for my child. With the help of this scholarship I can continue on working towards my college degree and one day accomplish my goals. In conclusion I would like to thank you for your time and consideration in granting me a scholarship to better my future. I look forward to hearing from your foundation in the near future.

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  1. you will be a wonderful role model with kids because just by reading your essay you have shown that you are very mature for your age. I really would not change a thing if it was me except maybe substitute the word goal instead of dream but you need to do what you think is best. As far as I'm concerned you covered all of your goals and did it quite well with out having to drag it out to make it long and boring for whoever reads it. I would type sincerely and then sign your name under it. then type your name under that

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