What is the best way to write this sentence? Punctuation?

Question

Should it be

1: Around the same time, November 1789, the Revolution Society, the target of much of Burke’s ridicule, held its annual meeting to commemorate England’s Revolution of 1688.

2: Around the same time- November 1789- the Revolution Society, the target of much of Burke’s ridicule, held its annual meeting to commemorate England’s Revolution of 1688

3: Around the same time, (November 1789) the Revolution Society, the target of much of Burke’s ridicule, held its annual meeting to commemorate England’s Revolution of 1688

4: the whole sentence is completely wrong

I know it seems ridiculous, but this essay is killing me! Should I use commas, hyphens, brackets, or something else? Or nothing?

Answer 1

i don't know that the whole sentense is compleatly wrong--some of the info is good, perhaps all of the info is good--but some info is missing.

my question is --what was around the same time as what? perhaps the sentense before this sentense makes is clear. also--keep in mind short sentenses are fine. you would be fine breaking it up.

but here is a sugestion:

The Revolution Society, being the tarket of much of Burke's Ridicule, held their annual meeting to commemorate Englands Revolution in 1688 which was around the same time as "----" wich occured in November 1789.  

Answer 2

Definitely number 3, but place the comma after the right hand bracket  so that you have:

Around the same time (November 1789), the Revolution Society, the target of much of Burke’s ridicule, held its annual meeting to commemorate England’s Revolution of 1688.

Being after the bracket is the same as being after "time" and places both "time" and "(November 1789)" into context.

In that sentence, the use of brackets lends itself to the actual period in time, but remains separate, from what you are writing. It makes life so much easier, for the reader - your ultimate aim.

The use of the commas - they are in the right places and they break the sentence up, correctly.

Answer 3

Around the same time, November 1789, the Revolution Society (the target of much of Burke's ridicule) held its annual meeting to comemorate Englands Revolution of 1688.

id do that

Answer 4

During November 1789, an institution that gained much ridicule from Burke, The Revolution Society, held its annual meeting to commemorate England's Revolution of 1688.

Answer 5

do you honestly need all of that information in the sentence? try to break it up

Answer 6

hiye!

why dont u try it this way...

~Around the same time in November 1789, the Revolution Society-the target of much of Burke’s ridicule-held its annual meeting to commemorate England’s Revolution of 1688.

because the date (novemeber 1789) doesnt need the pause of the comma....simply adding an "in" makes sense....and adding a hypen is more appropriate in this form of writing than adding a bracket which won't seem as formal, and a comma, which wont show that this is just an "outside" fact if u get what i mean....so a hyphen is appropriate for this...

it makes much more sense that way to me....hope u get what i mean lol

=D

hope that helps