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What should I title this poem I wrote? Any criticism? Comments?

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Three’s a lucky number

Except in many a case

What has happened to the world?

What has happened to the human race?

Even the wind taunts the world in their tumult of despair

Too much damage has been caused, too much that we cannot repair

But we know we must hold on just a little bit longer

Tragedies and sins only make us stronger

Tears fall, but love never betrays you

When all mirrors shatter, your heart’s all you have to gaze into

Wishing, hoping, dreaming, wanting

All replaced with crying, sobbing

And life goes on, is it true?

Is that what you expect us to do?

We’ll move on, that is, in due time

But for now the world must hold in a heavy sigh

We promise not to forget

And for a while, the vow is kept

But a memory fades, as we must learn

Something else comes up, and life takes a turn

Tears fall, but love never betrays you

When all mirrors shatter, your heart’s all you have to gaze into

Wishing, hoping, dreaming, wanting

All replaced with crying, sobbing

Honor and cherish things as they come and go fast

You never know what- or who- will be last

Go out into the world, with your head held up high

No matter what is done, no one can covet your pride

God alone is aware of life’s revolutions

It’s up to us, though, to find a solution

Until we can, the bird’s sad call will cry

And the world can release its long-held sigh

Tears fall, but love never betrays you

When all mirrors shatter, your heart’s all you have to gaze into

Wishing, hoping, dreaming, wanting

All replaced with crying, sobbing

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  1. Beautiful!  I agree with the person above me, the name Tears fall is a good title. Or Heart's Refelction. I love your poem by the way, I just, well, Love it!


  2. "A Broken Heart's Reflection" could be a good title.  In the stanzas that you keep repeating you talk about gazing into your heart instead of the mirror.  Another title, although obvious could be "Tears Fall".

    I really enjoyed it and thought you worded everything great!  I know the feeling and it sucks.  A lot of people can relate to this poem.  There are a few lines that I felt were a bit choppy but other than that I loved it!

    Great job ^^

  3. so great

  4. Heart's Despair.

    It has a wonderful rhythm.

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