What think you of Part 3 ish of Allegra?

Question

Leave the reed hollow. Do not allow

Drum rivers in the sand.

Destroy ceilings.

Set voices free.

Does the heart leave its warm bed to

Heat another's chill.

Can it. Would it. Should it

Choose.

Thorns twine the heart, slowing,

Constricting, stopping.

Once.

To leave its warm nest, unable

To void another's ice.

Death twice.

For each...choices. Salvation or

Redemption.

Forgetting or remembering.

Memory or reincarnation.

Peace be with you.

With you, Father.

Who tends, trims the vining rose,

What water from cracked reed

Reaches roots in dust.

Who judges the hand's action.

Vine a monolith only twice. Send one

Wickless candle...and

On my heart

Lay ice.

Answer 1

I like it but it seems to be about lost or a difficult love. For I have felt the heart fill with ice at the end of love.

Answer 2

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Answer 3

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Answer 4

Oh! Now there is not even a candle to light the way, for the candle is wickless.  What a cold, lonely way to die! If one is reincarnated without memory, isn't that a different person? We are our memories.  What would we be with total amnesia?

Answer 5

I'm with Todd on this...I must put them all to-gether (even tho' a work in progress) and see where the poem leads me.

In this piece I'm seeing some-one who gave their love/heart to another only for it to be rejected - experiencing death of the soul before  physical death.....I need to look deeper into the vine/monolith references.

Answer 6

A great read by a very gifted poet.  My compliments.  I had to back track and reread.  Still not quite sure of everything but the themes of salvation versus reincarnation run through your words and images.  A lot to discover not only in meaning but in  structure of lines and words.  I think I will go back now and write some more twinkle twinkle types!  lol

Answer 7

The choice one exists on is, of course, only the option of what to believe, not the ultimate and unknowable truth.  "Who judges the hand's action" is a marvelous line. The whole poem is very thought-provoking and inspiring.  You have such incredible talent, and I always look forward to reading every one of your poems, even if I am too speechless to comment on each one. Thank you.

Answer 8

Poets, like all artists, are immortal.  I have even heard it suggested that when a powerful piece of writing is created, so is another universe.  Write on!

I really appreciate your use of language.

Answer 9

I think I'm going to have to print all 4 parts out and read them together once you've posted the fourth. I feel like there are connections I'm missing this way.

I like how this is progressing.

Answer 10

I like it...........However it seems very cold  way to die

Being re-born & not remembering Who are we ??