What think you of a poem not about morning?

Question

Green shores. Green round bends horizoned

Up...up...far time pillars.

Salt. Fresh...

I am

Home.

Red tides wash, wish, creep silent. Creep

Crashing. Angry red eyes gaze at

Snap! shut claws on...nothing. Air. Salt.

Fresh...

I am

Home.

Storms impotent...I leave Ancestor paths...

Follow Ancestor ways.

Stroke River Mares' manes...they cannot

Forsake rivers.

I call green shores to them. For...

I am

Home.

How many smiling lips' lies...promises'

Twisted, frenzied dust mockeries

Battered through...tested, tested. Tested.

In the morning, I rose up Shining...prints

Gone...invisible whirlings millions of years

Defeated.

Petals in the air. Petals dewed delicate...as I,

Reaching,

Touch one

Flower...

Beyond years...

Fresh. Sweet.

And, in reaching down,

Tears combine dew

Into rain

Of a beating

Heart.

I am

Home.

Answer 1

Hello, Welcome back.

Some pretty lines here:

I call green shores to them.

Tears combine dew

Into rain

Of a beating

Heart.

Thanks for that.

Todd

Answer 2

This has some beautiful imagery! I am right there in Louisiana with you through this poem. Glad you are home...there is nothing like being home.

Answer 3

This is sure not Big Sur CA right now!  Sounds much more primal. Welcome back.

Answer 4

Very good to see you back. I would like Cajun breakfast...

Answer 5

There is no place like home. This poem reminds me that I am due to reurn back  home for a few weeks soon. (New Delhi, India)

Answer 6

It seems about a dream before Midnight.

Answer 7

as   always  [thy NOLA *

  SHREVEPORT

  LEES VILLE  L.A, *

Answer 8

My tears are falling in sympathy with yours. Good Unmorning to you!!!

Answer 9

Isn't coming home grand?

Lovely poem!

TD did his best (which is pretty d**n good) to cover the mornings, but we still missed ya!

Hmmmm....It's not coffee hour anymore. I'd say down there it's just about cocktail hour!

Cheers and welcome home!

Answer 10

I like the poem.  : )

I didn't know you had left. I checked your profile to see if you were deleted and I had to look for a "new you."

Answer 11

I think this poem is nice..

Answer 12

Nice arrangement of verbs. Good texture and rhythm.

Answer 13

I see you there  slowly melding

melting

back

leaning in

watching that organic sea.

good to know you brought your word pad.