What think you of a sandy, Morning poem?

Question

A beach of a Morning...

Hard, packed sand

From last night's rain...

Gull wanting a cracker.

And, the Mother overseas

All...foam waves leaving

Stories from Montezuma,

Sunken ships of empires.

The sand speckled

Driftwood is packed.

Cup of sand hoarded.

Towel shook soundly.

Back to today, back

To air conditioning...

Back to papers...

Not really seen, felt.

Sight, left with the

Heart, will always

Remain.

Answer 1

This touches me in a personal way. Our family lake cottage was just sold....belonged originally to my Great-grandma.

So many wonderful memories.

Thank you.

Answer 2

what is this sand i feel?

oh, its you.

Good Morning!

the 'driftwood is packed' line

is really cool..

wanted to go rumage thru it. lol

Answer 3

A sandy type of day, remembering the feelings each time you find something else that still has sand in it!  GM.  An enjoyable read.

Answer 4

Nice thought for the day. I am over due a break/. Thanks.

Answer 5

That is nature of the gulf all right. wonderful description, but caught me most

Back to papers..Not really seen, felt.

But the following I shall use as a quote of which I'll make no reference to U ( as if it was mine) :

Sight,left with the heart, will always remain

Bravo!:)

Answer 6

I want to know the stories from Montezuma, where are the Empires, who is left and who went there?

This  works for me!

Answer 7

I enjoyed your writing.  The only change I'd have made, if I had written it...

I'd have "towel snaps sharply" in order to make the transition back to the mundane world more poignant.

Answer 8

Life....Indeed a beach at times;)

Answer 9

Love your poetry, always good to read!  Your ac is on, your back at home, the gull has it's cracker! All is well except for the paper stack , yes I can feel it!, your heart remains, feel that too!  Cheers!!!

Answer 10

Darn! I missed this one, thanks to Yahoo. My kind of poem in theme--and of course the references and the visual aspect of the poem make the reader reach to the stars.

Answer 11

I love it!  Would live on the beach year-round, if I could.  Then that getting back to reality....hard to face, for me.

Answer 12

You deserve a hosanna - just for the first line alone.

I love puns.

But, this isn't all you give....the image of the sand being the detritus of stones from far off lands, and ancient wrecks is marvellous.

And then the narrative...from beach back to reality...And then the 'thought for the day'  - that experiences felt and seen remain always within us.  This is a poem, this is.

Loved it.

Answer 13

Tis a breath of fresh air!!! Good Morning ,,,,

For me ,,It's Back to the plans

Back to the stacks of wood

Always seen, Always felt

And always at the ready

Will always remain Posed a atttention

Answer 14

Salt, sand, sea and sun is good for everyone. lovely picture of a morning by the water. Thank you

S'andy living by the beach

Direct access to water

Every day it calls to me

and says "come down, you oughta"

Bring your towel and bring your lunch

Forget the bricks and mortar

Nothing beats clearing the head

than a dose of briny water

Answer 15

Nice....very nice.

I like descriptive scenes of nature.

Kool

Answer 16

Like that on this side of the Gulf, too.

Your sight is 20/20.

Answer 17

I really like it, but am not sure that typing it in this fashion makes it a poem.

Answer 18

That is wonderfully captured Elys! I love it...i love it.

and here it is a rainy day.

And no way and no way

The sky is clouded, sun is hidden

And the roads and lanes are flooded.

Cats and hens they swim together

Birds they have all soaked feathers.

Dogs are complaining to skies

Water water everywhere!!

Answer 19

Nice; I'll stick to the 'fresh Air', sans AC...!!