What would you rate it?

Question

Thick hands are squeezing,

These eyes are watching,

All minds are judging,

This light is too bright.

Under it, there's no way to see.

The pressure overcomes me,

The suffocation is overwhelming,

The surface I'm under is deadly,

I've fallen in too deep.

Under here, there's no air to breathe.

These walls are shrinking,

This box has been claimed,

This cage has been locked,

This is room to tight.

In here, lies no room for me.

Please answer all three questions-

What do you rate it?

Did it flow?

What would you change?

Answer 1

That is bloody brilliant. I love it. You really have a rare talent, wow!