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this smile is startin to fade away really fast..

and the tears..are building up again.

i told myself to be careful..

and once again..

i drove myself into a ditch..

You can make me laugh..

so very much..

and the other times..

you make me cry..and upset.

i try to stay shut out from the world..

because when i open up

it always hurts me in the end

Im so very lucky to have met who i have

because they love me and i know it

but sometimes i wonder

if they know that im scared all the time

to love them in return.

I decided not to long ago..

this mite be worth it..

and i was happy at the thought

but then..i realized..

im right back to where i was

when "he" had done it to me b4........

he....hurt me bad..and even though its been months

i still cant listen to this certain song

without wishin it never existed..

Honestly..i wish i would never of met you..

or them..because you are so very special..

they are oh so very kind hearted..

i wish i could hold your hand...

and i wish..i could hear you say..

what i need to hear..

not what i want to hear..

im fallin for someone..

i told myself i wouldnt..so.....

im bckin out now..before i lose it all

the happiness..the friends..

everthing that makes my outside..me

and im going to save the girl..

inside...who cant take this battle..nemore.

Answer 1

i like it...its not really deep and speaks to me...it might need more descriptive words&&creativityy...but overall its a good poemm...how about mineeeee?

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Answer 2

it sounds like a heartbreak story and it's rather depressing. it's a good poem though..

Answer 3

WOW! That was deep and made me want to cry! You should turn it into a song!

Answer 4

kewl

check my poems out

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Answer 5

i dont know for me it's a bit long, i like the part about the ditch cause i think everyone can metaphorically relate to "driving into a ditch". also probably some punctuation instead of the random dots where punctuation should be (ex: ...). other than that i think you have some good material on your hands.

good job!