When do you know when the poem is finished?

Question

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SUPPLICATION

by TD Euwaite

As I flip through the faces

in my chifferobe,

cleft chins, chiseled features…

fissures furrowed by

tears that flowed like rainwater

over lips hung low as Yorick’s,

I look for the one with the throbbing sobs,

vibrato as no cello could mimic.

The one that moans…

Plu plu plu please!

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Answer 1

It is over when you sigh ...

Answer 2

PP: Do you know why I pulled you over, Mr Euwaite?

T: No, Sir, Officer.

PP: I've pulled you over because you failed to signal anything. Your poem is incomplete.

T: Huh?

PP: You did not take us anywhere. You only showed us a funny face. I let you off with a warning last time. This time, I am throwing the book at you, and I've chosen "Jane's Fighting Ships." The thing must weigh 40 kilos.

T: Huh?

WHUMP!

Answer 3

This is pretty good. Better than I expected. I will see what else is going in here.

Answer 4

Jane didn't mean for anyone to use her BOOK as a weapon. But how would a poetry cop know that the pen is mightier than a book used to whump someone over the head?

Answer 5

You'll never know when you're finished eating tongue.

Answer 6

I was feeling uninspired.  Now I am inspired again.  Detailed descriptions, alliteration, middle rhymes, all the goodies that make an awesome poem.  I'm off to do that editing I've so been meaning to do.  I keep reading this over and over.  This is becoming one of my favorites of yours.

Answer 7

the muses embers flicker and as the light grows colder you hear the click of the door you know it's time to put down the quill and be at peace and one with the still...

Answer 8

You're not finished.  You need one more line.

Answer 9

Men/Women/ Pets in arms...

I'd never TOINK, Joink or YOINK

my fellow man or woman.

JINKEES SHAGGY!!

Answer 10

Using me wits of chicanery, I would chiffonade it with chickpea, pour it over a baked chickeree, wrap it in chiffon, and stuff it in your chiffonier... or I could just flip it with a chiasmus.

Nonsense you say. so say I.