When you write a song then strip it of its notes to render it poeminary, are you condemning it to obscurity?

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PROBLEM SOLVERS

A few seconds earlier,

Major English had felt the vibration.

Then the distinct whine of a failing baring,

a shuddering hammer soon to wham!

They looked at all the gear

and then each other,

just before the gyro-gasser blew.

No time to dawn their suits,

a momentary smooch,

then,

off they were flung

into oblivion…

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Answer 1

Sing with me. Ready? "Don we now our reading glasses..."

Very visual. Of course, it don't rime, but not all poems have to rhyme to be great.

(Spell Chick says my spelling is fine)!

Answer 2

No, this is a classic.

Answer 3

I love the poem, but I don't like the idea of being flung into oblivion...I'm afraid of heights.

Answer 4

making nice is a good thing.  Before oblivion comes the dawning of the age of Aquarius.

Answer 5

Nope!

This one is in the poetic 'Hall of Fame'!!!

Answer 6

Sorry, all my apparel is straight...*sigh*. It's okay, I'm stone blind without my contacts. Reading glasses will be next, then bi-focals, then Lasik...maybe.

As for oblivion, bring it on, the only unexplored frontier.

Answer 7

Bearing on baring?  Hard to send the mechanic in, but a smooch...always there!  Bowie would be proud.