Which poem is better? ((Urdu speakers/readers only!))?

Question

1)

kabhi soncha na tha

Mohabbat Mein Itna Door Nikal Jayenge

Kabhi Socha Na Tha,

Hum Wafa Karke Bhi Bewafa Kehlayenge

Kabhi Socha Na Tha,

Zamane Se Tanha Hi Takrayenge

Kabhi Socha Na Tha,

Hum To Pyaar Ke Naam Se Hi

Na Aashna The,

Chahat Ki Itni Badi Saza Payenge

Kabhi Socha Na Tha,

Uska Har Andaaz Dusron Se

Juda Lagta Hai,

Uske Rang Mein Hum Rang Jayenge

Kabhi Socha Na Tha…

2)

Socha nahi tha kabhi aise bhi din aayenge

Tumse milne ko hum is kadar taras jaayenge

Kaise guzaarte hai pal bin tumse baat kiye

Ise aap bhla kaise samajh paayenge

WHICH ONE IS BETTER???

salaam

Answer 1

The second one, its way shorter.

Answer 2

awwwwwwwwww

bahaut bahaut ache hain

they are totally sweet

magar mujhe mushkil ho rahi hai choose karnay main

mujhe lagta hai mujhe dura wala zyada acha laga hai

so no 2

so sweet (sniff, sniff)

hey u knwo what? maybe i'll send it to "someone"

Answer 3

You're no Faiz Ahmed Faiz - but it's a start !!

Both are ok. They both sound unfinished. The first one's better, out of the two.

Answer 4

I like the 2nd one !

Answer 5

the second one is cute :)

Answer 6

the second one.

its shorter and to the point.

Answer 7

I hate this Urdu lovey dovey stuff.

Answer 8

Most definitely the first one is the better of the two.

Without doubt. 100%

Answer 9

Wellz my urdu is kinda weak but from what I could understand I like the second one.

Answer 10

Second one sound better, Short and to the point!

I think second one is Ghazal and first one is something else.

Ohh I suppose to write in URDU....

Janaab doosray number wali behtar hai. Ab main nay yeh nahi dekha k bahar main hai ya nahi.

Shairi Kia Hai

Dili Jazbaat ka aik naam hai

Answer 11

The first one

what do you think of the following

Kahain us se ham ke kiya hai shab-e-gham buri bala hai

Hamain kiya bura tha marna?....ager ek baar hota

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n this one:

Tu apney dil ki jawaan dhadkanon ko ginn ke bata

meri tarha tera dil....beqarar hai ke nahi?

Answer 12

2nd one is short and sweet.

wa alayk as salam

Answer 13

W/salam!

lolz.....

why are they just so sad????

: (

Ok I guess the secound one is not very sad!

but first one is better!

Answer 14

The second --your love for your boyfriend is most enlightening.

Answer 15

They are both sweet, lol =p

But i like the 1st one.

Answer 16

My favourite is:

We sang Ramadan

And we ran with the gang

Singing do w*p do wooby do way  

Answer 17

I like #1!!!

Do I speak Urdu.

May be and may be not!:D

Answer 18

kabhi soncha na tha

Mohabbat Mein Itna Door Nikal Jayenge

Kabhi Socha Na Tha,

Hum Wafa Karke Bhi Bewafa Kehlayenge

Kabhi Socha Na Tha,

Zamane Se Tanha Hi Takrayenge

Kabhi Socha Na Tha,

Hum To Pyaar Ke Naam Se Hi

Na Aashna The,

Chahat Ki Itni Badi Saza Payenge

Kabhi Socha Na Tha,

Uska Har Andaaz Dusron Se

Juda Lagta Hai,

Uske Rang Mein Hum Rang Jayenge

Kabhi Socha Na Tha…

Is my favourite!

Answer 19

second one

Answer 20

they're both really good but second one is a little better.