Which stanza should I use?

Question

Which one, in your opinion, is better? A beginner poet, by the way. Trying to practice. I personally favor the first. What do you guys think?

1. The cemetery,

a different dimension,

where the air is contaminated

with nostalgia,

and distant cries of grief.

A surreal atmosphere,

like peering through a cloud.

2. The cemetery,

a dream-like dimension,

surreal,

like peering through a cloud

and on laughing gas

at the same time,

except you're not laughing.

Answer 1

1st  

Answer 2

The first one.

Answer 3

Both are good efforts to be sure.  The second is less reliant on cliche' images.

In the second option, you might wish to consider replacing "and on laughing gas"  with,,, ( while ) on laughing gas.  The word "and" in this case offers nothing to the verse.