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Question

Watching

Your eyes move in my direction

Simply looking at my body

They speak to me with affection

Without words you are truly pleased

Simply looking at my body

From my crown and then to my feet

Not one section is overlooked

And not one hair is out of place

You speak to me with affection

Knowing that I belong to you

With your gaze you caress my soul

In the distance you comfort me

Without words you are truly pleased

Standing there, you give me a smile

My being is your perfection

My existence is all you need

Answer 1

OMG Awwwww so sweet and sounds so sincere!!  Loved it !!! Cheers !!!

Answer 2

i think is beautiful!

Answer 3

I'm completely alone now...this poem of yours makes me feel so horny! Now...how mean is that??? lol

Answer 4

thats very creative thats very unique and all you can do is keep writing maybe one day you can write a book of poetry

Answer 5

I loved it, and you actually gave it a title... *she smiles*

I have one suggestion, the third stanza, last line... "From the distance..." instead of "In the distance..."

Just a suggestion, mind you. It's beautiful as is... "My being is your perfection..."

Temari

Answer 6

Wonderful love poem!  Good for you.  I think S3L3 is a great picture.  Well done.

Answer 7

That was really touching and beautiful. I liked it ^_^.

Answer 8

Ya did good.

Answer 9

Found it quite s**y.

Where you aiming for that or is it just me?