Will You Rate and Suggest A Title for My Poem?

Question

As sleep trips into night

and darkness consumes my eyes

I fight to stay awake

and sleep and awake intwine

My body is glued to the bed

My arms are stuck to my sides

A chorus whispers in my ear

and my sanity has lost its guide

I feel this paranoia grasp me

as a hand grabs at my neck

and I fight to lift my arms to pull away

or at least to fight back

My heart begins to skip a beat

as I attempt to open my eyes

but this hand smacks me across the face

and now I am blind

A nausea overcomes me

and the hand filters my scream

and the music blares louder

and enables me to dream

And then suddenly it stops

and I tremble in fear

waiting for my paralysis to come back

and the music to reappear

Answer 1

i'm sorry that i can't think of a title, but ur poem is really good! out of a 5 i will give it a 5!

Answer 2

My favorite poet always informs the readers that she doesn't name poetry, because it would be trying to describe a color to a blind person. She always says that the title is up to the reader and if the reader likes it enough they make their own title.

Answer 3

Some names Are:

In my deep sleep

Annoy the Paranoia

Midnight Shadows  

Answer 4

This is a very different slant on the process of going to sleep. It is like a battle rages against an action that is supposed to give a body rest. Unlike the battle to fall asleep (insomnia) - this writer feels helpless and fights - what is supposed to be - a natural process. Suggestion: Your meter needs more work - it is really rough in spots. Here's a link - to help you with your count: ♥

http://www.uncg.edu/~htkirbys/meters.htm

Edit: Maybe the title should be "Sleep Paralysis" - as you stated.

Answer 5

i like your poem, it is very good! i give it a 9 out of 10!

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