Will you please rate this poem that I wrote?? (:?

Question

OK, well here is the poem. It is not about myself, it's how some people see themselves.

Trapped in a room-

Alone with the enemy.

A room composed of mirrors,

My reflection stares back.

Ugly.

Ashamed.

Confused.

Alone.

Why does this happen?

How did it start?

An endless nightmare

And your the monster.

Ugly.

Ashamed.

Confused.

Alone.

Lifeless, but living

Stares back with a penetrating glare

Who is the enemy?

Ugly.

Ashamed.

Confused.

Alone.

My reflection..

Immortal

A puppet under my control

Ugly.

Ashamed.

Confused.

Alone.

But maybe my reflection isn't the enemy-

Maybe it was me all along...

Will you please rate it 1-10 with 1 being the worst and 10 the best?? and maybe give a reason too ?? thanks (:

Answer 1

hey well that was very good

i will give you a 9.5 cuz it was awesome but not perfect

lets face it no ones perfect

it was very good because it seemed very real

although i would think of adding something else instead of ALONE

like

ugly.ashamed.confused.makes me want to moan

something like that

well i hoped i helped

Answer 2

It was okay.  Maybe a six.  Too repetitive and the transition to the end was too sudden.  Try adding more lines and extra stanzas.  Also, you used your when it should be you're in second stanza, fourth line.  

Answer 3

rate 7

Answer 4

Stanza 2, line 4 your should be you're.

Take out the last two lines -- it's obvious.

7

Answer 5

I'd give it a six or seven, probably closer to seven. It's not the best I've heard, but it's better than most.

Answer 6

9 i love it!!!!! but not so much the ugly,ashamed confused alone