Will you read this paragraph and critique it?

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Burn out. I wasn't born this way. None of us were.

I was born a loser though. All of us were. It's not about how we grew up really. We weren't drawn to each other because of socio economic status or anything like that. We all came from different walks of life. Sure some of us had the propensity to be a loser in this respect. Being a loser is like an epidemic. You never know when it's going to hit you. I used to blame it on my parents. My dad didn't have a job or even go to college until well into his 40's. The only work my mom does is coming up with new illnesses so she can keep getting her social security checks. They were lazy losers, so it made sense that I would be one too. But there are other people whose parents are ambitious and caring, and they still end up losers. It's like schizophrenia. It hits late teens and gets progressively worse until you are removed from all reality. I tried once not to be one but it got me the end. It's hard work NOT to be. Although I do have

Answer 1

Kafka and Jules Verne's "Paris in the 20th Century" evince this perspective.

The "anti-Kafka" is Friedrich Nietzsche's "Ueberman," who is like Abraham Maslow's "self-actualizer" or "overcomer."

"Burnout" and "loser" versus "overcomer" and "self-actualization."  Some authors who point ways and means to positive, constructive change:

"Freakonomics," S. Levitt,

"The Path of the Higher Self," Mark Prophet,

"The Reincarnation of Edgar Cayce?", Free and Wilcock, http://www.divinecosmos.com

"The Master of Lucid Dreams," Dr. Olga Kharitidi,

"The Great Divorce," C. S. Lewis,

"Autobiography of a Yogi," Yogananda,

"To Live Within," Lizelle Reymond,

"Testimony of Light," Helen Greaves,

"Expecting Adam," Martha Beck, and

"The Overachievers," Alexandra Robbins, are worthwhile.

Answer 2

You can be anything you want. You can be a cook, a scientist whatever you want. But you can't do it without passion. The negative attitude you have will soon portray your life. Your not the same as your parents, your a totally different person if you want to be.

I use to be like you, in the sense i felt like i had nothing to offer to this world and the world had nothing to offer me. I went on holiday over seas and i went to an orphanage for the deaf, and my eyes were wide open, they havn't shut ever since. There smiling faces, there positive mind set, they had nothing in my eyes, but in their eyes thay had everything. And i soon realised that we all have everything, you just have to really want it life's too sort to be sulking in your misery.

You can be anything you want to be your the only thing stopping yourself.

Your only a loser if you think you are.

EDIT: sorry about that, well i guess it's quite good seeing as everyone took it seriously. Very good. Everyone seems to find a way to relate to this somehow. A story that someone can relate to is always a good one. In fact I would like to here the end of it one day.

Answer 3

In my relationship with persons, even ones who by the very nature of their spontaneous expressions(such as yours?) are not what they think they are. I have found that it does not help, in the long run, to act as though I were something that I am not and find it troubling as I am listening to you that you are not who you think you are. And both of us can not move away from what we think we are until we more accurately and thoroughly accept what we are. How could anyone be born a "loser". There is a blank "tabula rasa" yet to be carved, written, sculptered, or just pissed on by the venom of this existance. I have found it of enormous value when I can permit myself to understand more then critique. And what you have done is ...opened channels whereby others can offer their feelings rather then critiques. Although I found something of my younger self in you, an uneasiness disturbs.   Have you nailed my own feelings of waking up after 65 years to the realization that this writer did in so many ways become the frog that became the prince who even once walked this earth almost more like a God, but so swiftly after existing such, now finds that he no longer exists. My critique? You have opened channels whereby others can communicate their feelings of their own perceptual worlds. There can be no greater gift. This is my critique.

Answer 4

you're right bro. and there's nothing you can do.

Answer 5

Yes I have read the paragraph but I don't have any idea about to critique it.

Answer 6

Man, you are depressed and have some serious self esteem issues.... I can relate, but you know what I did? I told myself, even if I wasn't born with wonderful parents,  I was going to correct the lazy loser in my family and be different and I was... so get your self up, go to a local community college ask for an aptitude test, see what you are good at and then get a government Pell grant and go for it! You may want to go to a trade school, they offer aid and they don't take too long.... All you need is a little push and you are no longer a LOSER... first you have to convince yourself! Repeat it every day in the mirror... "I am NOT a loser" and then GO DO something about it! So I AM PUSHING...tomorrow is a new day, get up call and find out about different schools, if you know what you enjoy, then go to that school and get a career going. You don't have to be a doctor of lawyer.....I'm not, but I am successful!