Will you read this poem and give suggestions? thanks!

Question

The ocean breeze on my face

The warm sand between my toes

How God created something so perfect

Is something which I don’t know

The swaying of the palm trees

The blue sky as clear as day

The saltiness on my lips

In the month we know as May

The crashing waves along the shore

Sending up sprays of the cool water drops

The rainbow shells along the coast

And piers with some tourists atop

Wonder and amazement grabs hold of me

Of this beautiful, astounding place

With the pink, orange, and yellow sunset

It’s just as though seeing God face to face

Answer 1

wow... that is really good, but a little wordy... try to shorten up the lines a little...say the same thing w/ less words...that's what good poets do...take out some of the "the"'s