Will you tell me what you think of my poem?

Question

We are just roadsigns By Laura S.

a handful of friends and work everyday

leaves me so little time for what I want to say.

If you're in my life,You're a treasure indeed!

to me you are more than a place to sow seed!

I read all these prophecies and "words from the Lord"

and I think "how impersonal"and yet cannot afford,

to ignore what they say as they're directions for prayer

When I open my emailI see them, right there

so I don't mean to be lacking in grace

when I forward these emails that are right in my face

My thoughts as I do it are simply this

"my friends that I love Oh Lord don't let them miss

Any truths that are pertinent faithful or wise

cause I don't want to lose

these spiritual ties" I think we're obscure

and hidden from sight

but I think that the Lord will bring it to light!

What we've done, what we've said

How we blessed people too

How we've stood in the battle

because it was the right thing to do!

Answer 1

Dear sister your poem describes you so very well.It is obvious that it came straight from your heart.We are so fortunate to have you for our friend and sister in the Lord.We love you!

Answer 2

I think it was pretty good, you might want to make one last check through though, because I feel it doesn't read quite right in places. Keep up the good work!

Answer 3

Powerful!

Answer 4

Wow this is good

Way better then what i could ever do

=]

Answer 5

Laura, when writing poems, you might want to skip one line before you rhyme again, it makes it sound a bit better, for example... So I don't mean to be lacking in grace, something, something, something, something, then When I forward these emails that are right in my face, so leave a sentence in between and make sure the sentence in between doesn't end with "ace" but maybe a little lower tone like "ight", maybe "light"...  I still love your poem!  This world lacks creativity, everybody wants to copy each other and all everyone talks about are rides and who's got the biggest rim's and who's got more money in the bank.  I commend you for trying to create something that is your own.  I like it, but keep doing it, you'll find your niche soon!

Answer 6

it's beautiful.

Answer 7

It wasnt good but it wasnt bad but dont give up on poetry I see real potential!

Answer 8

I like it.

Answer 9

its good if it has meaning to u

Answer 10

very very very nice, my girl friends into poetry, i wish she could do it like this, good stuff. keep going.

Answer 11

i loved it. i wish i could write something like that.

Answer 12

If you want to write really great poetry you need to read really great poetry. As a songwriter and poet I can tell you that your poem is the reflection of the way you personally feel and there is nothing wrong with that but it is limited to letting others feel something from it. Someone who is not spiritual wont get anything from it. I dont think it's bad but I'm sure you could do better. Open up your mind to a world of knowledge and dont limit yourself. You will be surprised what you can do.

Answer 13

Hmm? not bad! I would keep writing...Do you have any more maybe a little different? (This can't be the only one?)

Answer 14

dont like it..oh its ok i guess

Answer 15

very good, not joking!

Answer 16

i loved your poem! you really have a lot of talent to write poetry =]

Answer 17

its really good and normally, rhyming poems suck. lol.

i just normally dont like poems that rhyme. people try to hard. this is really good though.

Answer 18

beautiful

Answer 19

there is no bad poem only better poems i think its good

Answer 20

It's good ...forward it.

Answer 21

Righteous!.....I do like!........Heartfelt for sure Sis!

Peace to you.

Pete

Answer 22

Very meaningful!

You are a blessing to me, and You are blessed by God

Answer 23

I just vomited all over myself.