Word DNA poetry - DIS poem. Do you like it or love it?

Question

When we stop looking at each other in DISmay or DISdain, and stop DIScriminating against others who look DIfferent,

and stop being DIScreet with our "DIrty little secrets" that require DISclosure -- we won´t need to BEhave. We will just BE

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So take off that face of DISgust and DISmay. Stop DISgracing others with your BAD BEhavior. Stop watching DISney.

Don´t be a DISciple, and stop DISciplining others. Just show others how to BE.

Then we will no longer be DISappointed in each other. Nor will we live in a world of such gross globaLIZed DISparity,

DIScord, DISsent or DISheartening situations. Are you a fan of the DIablo?

And when we all just BE, there will be no more DISeases of the mind or body! So stop DISsing me!

.....reason and source of this "knowledge" will be revealed at end of answer period.

Answer 1

The style is called slam poetry and your attempt at it is just a little under the board. This style is a barrage of no holds barred, no punctuation, non stop buckshot angerspeak! I do like the way you showed DIS in the work. It is very entertaining... but doing BE and LIZ was a standout on the fact that you ran out of gas in a manner of speaking! Let me explain...

Do not do a DISservice to yourself by DISabling the ways you DIScharge the DISsing of DIS and it DISpleases me greatly that you're at a DISadvantage DISaffliating the DISbursement of DIS to the point of DISappointment and DISapproval. I DISagree with your DIScovery and DIStribution of DIS because this ain't no DISco! Your work was DISjointed DISfigured DISheartening DISorganized DISpondant a DISplay that's in DISarray so put it in a DIShwasher and clean it up! I don't mean to sound DISspirited and DISsonant to the point that I wouldn't DISqualify you yet as long as you DIStribute  DISsolve and DISsipate DIS better than what you did. Come back more DIStinguished and DIStinctive and not in DIStress... I love you... PEACE!

This is in no way was a personal attack on you! It is an example of how slam style is more portrayed. You have the right idea, but if you have to, cheat and use a dictionary (that thing with all the words in it...) and make it part of the learning process in your journey of creative writing. Slam style is very demanding and you have to command the English language. Keep it up because you have great potential. Grade: C+

Answer 2

This is bloody fantastic! You have a rare talent. Oh my, this is just so evocative!