Would anyone like to comment on my poem?

Question

h**l

h**l is not a place of fire and brimstone

of tortured souls

lamenting, weeping.

h**l is a place

of soul ripped out

of soaring joy deflated

of hope defeated.

Answer 1

I really like this , it tells of our own anguish right here on earth of our disappointments and our fallen hopes!!  Good Job!! Cheers!!

Answer 2

it's very nice!!!

Answer 3

do you like gouda?

you may want to get some help

hippopotamus

... and to top it all off its a haiku!!! =]

Answer 4

i like it but i would toy around with this part

"of soul ripped out"

maybe write the same thing with different words.

Answer 5

I have to go to h**l to check what you wrote is right or wrong.

Answer 6

sounds good.