Would like some opinions please?

Question

Back you call me

Sickening sweet words.

The honey that pours out of that

Tiger’s eye.

That which paralyzes me so.

Through my skin you ooze

Towards my heart

In my veins you seep

Around my body

Right around

Through me

Though I do not

Expect you to linger.

You never do

And I have learnt

To never long for

All of you

Answer 1

Seems to me that you're comparing drugs (like heroine) to a love relationship with another person.  The problem is if you read it as though you're referring to a person, it's kinda weird.  If you read it as though you're talking about drugs, then well it makes some sense.  

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Answer 2

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Answer 3

Some love isn't meant to last, this poem illustrates that point. Good job!  

Answer 4

awesome. i love the way you have used sweet words to describe things that are not necessarily "sweet" in themselves.