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Would my song make a hit (I just paid to get it copyrighted did i waste my money?)btw it s a dark one alt

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“why did he do it (shoot up that school)” Everyday was torture teasing and taunts, The words he spoke that day still haunts, Yet people overlook him as a psycho, He just wanted to be Michael, A regular kid playing amongst friends, But he didn’t have the money to keep up with the popular trends, So he was stuck in a category , which left the school wrecked and gory. Let him be, Let him be, Or you shall see, The roots of his misery, How cruel the kids can be, leave him be, or the world will see, All the roots of his misery..leave him be His home life was no good for him, but they all decided it would be so funny to depants him in the Gym, Every day it seemed to get worse and harder to cope, he tried to find happiness with a rope, attached to his throat,2 minutes had passed as he started to choke, the rope broke, the attempt to end it all, Was taken from him and the angel had to fall, He tried to reach out, but was only left to his own thought like a crop that felt the drought, they stunted his growth and killed his soul, it was too late now he had lost all control, He packed his backpack full of weaponry, hid in the gym where they all would be, wanted all to see, the error of their ways and how their actions, would pierce them with bullets separate them from their social factions. Let him be, Let him be, Or you shall see, The roots of his misery, How cruel the kids can be, leave him be, or the world will see, All the roots of his misery..leave him be He unloaded each gun, grabbed a clip and loaded another one, They would run they would scream, Some of their minds could not calculate reality it had to be a dream, Oh it was a dream a dream Michael had everyday since 5th grade, when the on slot started to be vehemently displayed, he had pictured it just like this all of them slain, flat lining their brain, he reached back into his arsenal, got out the fluid for the barbeque, poured it over himself, lit the match and begun to melt. Let him be, Let him be, Or you shall see, The roots of his misery, How cruel the kids can be, leave him be, or the world will see, All the roots of his misery..leave him be Media recounted all of the facts surrounding it they never uncover the truth, Didn’ 't think this was something that stemmed from years of abuse, The "victims" were held as heroes and would still get to graduate, even though they brought about their own fate, Michael, poor , Michael was to be known as the campus psycho, and in many opinions he was the devil, A stone cold killer a rebel, But had they of left him as a peer, that campus would have never seen such fear, Maybe had they given him a chance, He woulda never fell into a trance, He was a nice guy, just a little shy, He was a nice Guy, Just a little shy He killed 25 people that day and unknowing people still ask why.........

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  1. Not a little dark, very dark.  I personally think that you have talent, I didn't like the message in your song, but it's clear that you have some song writing skill.  With that said, I don't believe this would be a hit for the simple fact that school shootings are a very sensitive subject and a song sympathizing with the shooter would not go over well.  I don't know many producers that would touch that song at all, unless they want controversy.  I think you should channel your talents in a more positive direction or lighten up a bit.  If you wrote a different song and it wasn't so "dark" I'd want to hear it.  

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