Would someone please proof-read my Financial Aid appeal letter?

Question

Please proof-read and offer any helpful suggestions.

Thank you

: ) Ashley

Dear Office of Student Financial Aid,

My name is ________ and I am writing to ask you to appeal my suspension of federal aid. I would very much like to thank you for the opportunity to explain why I had trouble last fall and spring semesters, also I would like to state that I take complete responsibility for my grades and absences. One major stressor that played a role has been my involvement with a severe custody battle for my 6 year old daughter over which I have been in court several times. Other monumentally important areas of my life, such as my studies, have been negatively effected because I was so emotionally and financially overwhelmed by this dispute.

I do realize that I neglected my studies and I know that given the chance I would prove myself the devoted student that I know I can and will be. I completed 6 hours this summer. Not only did I enjoy my classes but I did well in them.

I have compiled a list that I believe will prove helpful to my successfull completion of this next semester:

1 Thankfully, as of July 31, 2008 all court disputes have been resolved, therefore I no longer will be emersed in the court system, the attorneys, the fee’s and challenges that go along with it.

2. This semester I intend to enroll part time to ease back into a healthy routine and ensure that I do not take on more than I can handle at this time.

3. The 7 hours this fall in which I am enrolled are online which I believe will help me to manage my time wisely so that I can balance my family and studies.

My goal is to earn a degree in Human and Family Sciences with a minor in Social Work so I can make a difference in the lives of others and be an asset to our community, as well as be a role model for my daughter. I have completed all but 11 hours of my basic classes. I have also completed 18 hours for my minor in Social Work and look forward to completing my major classes for Human and Family Science. I work full time to support my daughter and myself but my checks are very stretched and I still do not fully have the resources to pay for my tuition. I am a hard-working and dedicated person, and I would like so much the chance to prove this through my performance next semester.

Thankyou whole-heartedly for your consideration of my request. Should there be any other questions I can answer or information I can provide I can be reached at ***-***-****,

Thanks again,

_____________

Answer 1

very good, it really is similar to the one that I submitted this Fall (it was approved and my F/A was awarded). It will help to include any documentation (I would go for legal bills for the sympathy factor).

just a caution with the whole "on-line" courses thing... I have been there and done that for much the same reasons you are kids, time (lack there of), transportation ect... On-Line is not easy you have to be very disciplined don't fall into the notion that "I'll do it later" or "I don't need the instructors help I can do it on my own". Your not superwoman!

Answer 2

Sounds good to me. It's better than mine; mine was short but thorough.

Just check into the way you are using the word "effected" I think the correct word should be affected. Please correct me if I'm wrong.

Other than that I'm pretty sure your appeal will be approved. Good luck!

Answer 3

One major stress that played a role has been my involvement with a severe custody battle for my 6 year old daughter over which I have been in court several times. (Stressor isn't a word.)

I have compiled a list that I believe will prove helpful to my successful completion of this next semester: (Successfull isn't a word.)

1.) Thankfully, as of July 31, 2008 all court disputes have been resolved, therefore I no longer will be immersed in the court system, the attorneys, the fees, and the challenges that go along with it.

2.) This semester I intend to enroll part time to ease back into a healthy routine and ensure that I do not take on more than I can handle at this time.

3.) The seven hours this fall in which I am enrolled are online which I believe will help me to manage my time wisely so that I can balance my family and studies.

Thank you whole-heartedly for your consideration of my request. Should there be any other questions I can answer or information I can provide I can be reached at ***-***-****.