Would this be a good start for a love poem?

Question

At sunsets I sit and dream

of your beauty and your grace

at nights I stare at the moon

as it glitters your lovely face

you are the sunshine, i am a leaf

but now black clouds are between us

and they weep with so much grief

when they hear all about us

they grow thin to let me see

what i truely adore, your face

and they set your rays free

for me to dearly embrace

Answer 1

aww thats lovely i like it...great job you should be a pro

Answer 2

That is bloody brilliant. I love it. You really have a rare talent, wow!

Answer 3

My love for you

is deeper than it seems

??

idk...

I'd also change "at sunsets"  to "as the sun sets"

Answer 4

Yes, it's an insightful poem, well

written.  I can, actually, feel the

pain that the clouds caused, and

that's what's required of poets,

writers.  To have the reader feel,

see, what's going on.

Answer 5

beautiful.

Answer 6

im not one for poetry but that was beautiful i can see it came from your heart. keep it as it is. so romantic.