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Question

ok heres my newest :]

MIXED EMOTIONS

I wish you would understand;

I still can't live without you.

I can tell when you lie,

But I don't know what's true.

Why did you do this?

You ripped me apart!

You tore me to shreads,

Then threw down my heart.

But somehow you are my drug;

I feel weird without you.

You are everything to me,

And I don't know what to do.

I'm confused about everything-

And the way I feel.

How can I hate you,

But love you still?

Answer 1

I like the last 2 sentences in the ending. Very catchy!

Answer 2

sounds like an Avril or Brittney Spears song.....

Answer 3

Original

Answer 4

I agree with one of the other ppls that said that the last 2 lines are the coolest! very catchy! :)

Answer 5

Last three lines, great! 5,5 punchline,4. It does sound a little 'teeny pop' and maybe you should then tidy up the 'form' so it's a little more regular ie syllable counts in lines match (not necessarily all the same but regular none the less)

Answer 6

love poem? or a theme? not clear