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Would want to read more? A western.?

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How dose this paragraphs sound? Would you went to read more?

My main character is a Marshal named Henry. In this paragraph he’s having his horse stolen, he’s killed two already.

James Wilson mind was working at full speed. Henry said, “You tried to buy my horse, and when that didn’t work you tried to have me killed. I knew I was being followed so I lead you here.” Wilson said, “That’s true, and I will be taking the horse.” Henry asked, “Just what in the h**l makes you thank your going to leave here with my horse? “ Wilson answered, “Well as I see it that’s a shotgun, two barrels, two body’s and I know you didn’t have time to reload, so I’ll be taking the horse.” Henry asked, “you willing to bet your life on it?’ Wilson answered, “It’s no bet for I’m right, so I’ll be taking that horse now.” Wilson went for his gun; Wilson had been wrong, dead wrong.

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  1. I don't think I'd want to read more.  You should get someone to help you edit and use more descriptive language

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