Would you care to comment on a poem about morning?

Question

Sauna Morning

By C.S. Scotkin

Steamy palms, weary fronds.

Frogs delight bromeliad pools.

Toadstools rise in my garden

long before the Sun

Answer 1

Loved "Toadstools rise in my garden long before the Sun"

Good morning, ma

Answer 2

I like that it's short and to the point, but you can add more substance to it to make it more interesting, but this is a good start.

Answer 3

I thought this was great. You are succinct and expressive.

However,I think there's a problem with the word bromeliad, in the second line. It is not a common word by any means, and you run the serious risk of losing your reader with it. In a longer work, it would not be such a problem, but for such a short piece it poses quite a threat.  

Answer 4

Whew, HOT!

We're enjoying the most perfect Labor Day weekend weather I can ever remember. Seems like it always rains at least one day.

Lovely sauna morning to you!

Answer 5

Sunny bright, coolish morn

dewy grass invites

paper boy's aim

Sunday paper wet!

Answer 6

PP: Do you know why I pulled you over, Ms. Scotkin?

C: No, Sir, Officer.

PP: I've pulled you over because it is cruel and unusual punishment to write about tropical plants on or after Memorial Day Weekend.

C: Huh?

PP: Are you aware that it will be 49 degrees in Warroad, Minnesota tomorrow?

C: Huh?

PP: Please, be more carefree next time.