Would you care to comment on the poem about a visit to the beach?

Question

Beach Evening

by C.S. Scotkin

Cooler breezes,

seaweed fragrance,

tropic jade water.

Coquinas sparkle,

breathing jewels

feel vibrations,

dive into wet sand as one;

eyeless they peek,

see I’ve walked on.

Sit on the sand

little crabs fiddle,

scurry away.

This warm sea

has noticed me

breathing her ancient

rhythms, rhymes,

when sun sets

we breathe as one,

wait for stars

and wish…

Answer 1

From "This warm sea" to the end...to me, the most powerful expression.  I loved that part.

ma

Answer 2

breathtaking.

Answer 3

Hi...!

I read this several times. And then again for good measure.

I think it's one of those that I'll read again too. It's really colourful and very comfortable on the imagination.

I really liked it.

Tanx,

D!

Answer 4

I love it. I really liked the part about "when sun sets we breathe as one, wait for stars and wish". I'm right there on the beach..

Answer 5

Yes, your poem is descriptive and lovely.

I live there, but the water is never jade off my Island. It is, nonetheless a reflection of the sky's moods and that is enough for me.

Answer 6

pretty.....