Would you comment on my poem please?

Question

When you have walked in my shoes tell me how I can't feel the way I do. You say you don't understand why I didn't scream. Well let someone touch you too. You won't know the pain of being afraid to come home until you go through what I have been through. While you smoke yourself sick I'll sit here thinking what a d**k. You let him hurt her...how could you do that? You're her mom...buck up and be there? Now the times have past and you think all is well. News flash you cant buy her love now.

Feelings let me know them. Thanks and God Bless!

Answer 1

bit disturbing

Answer 2

that is really good

Answer 3

There as to me for what I were in the aftermath reckoning just up down look diasies moon that curl arm tanned liver do sit top tower animal brood train smash.

Answer 4

great poem.

very meaningful and i can tell you meant what u said...

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Answer 5

wow...thats really good. that definetly has alot of feeling in it! and sooo true!! keep on writing you are really good at it!  :)

Answer 6

Woww, I lovee.  :)

Its so insightful on the relationships in a troubled family, as far as the mom and the daughter through the eyes of another member of the family or maybe a friend witnessing it.

This is original, its fresh, and its dark (but in a good mysterious type of way, you know?)

You should defiantly keep writing stuff like this, cause I love this style you use. Hard to explain, but its a bittersweet poem that changes you feelings from angry to remorseful and sad that the mom won't change or do anything about it because its too late.

I personally love it. You are gonna go far if you keep it up.

And may God bless you too.  :)