Would you offer your suggestions on my poem about humanity?

Question

THE JOURNEY DOWN DEATH MOUNTAIN

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Wasting time creating lies in drops of solid Earth and sky

So we can swim and sigh inside all these little things.

Ears and eyes turn back inside because they felt melodic vibes

From those who never seemed alive and surely could not sing.

Whispered noises, giving choices, no longer cast aside as voices

They say the life you thought was yours in many ways is not.

Another child reconciled when death certificate is filed

His sickly host is buried deep as he becomes a god.

The greatest lie is you and I the individual

We share (but we are unaware) of where we hide the soul

The single mind only divides and opens at your birth

For every thing and living being is taken from the Earth

Answer 1

well- said my friend.