Would you please critique another Trigee, inspired by Reenie?

Question

Love Trigee

by C.S. Scotkin

A call………………Your voice

confirms…………...speaks love

the date…………… so near

the wait…………… no fear

is short…………….. you’re here

you whispered……. my love.

Answer 1

Fabulous. Thank you, Reenie for inspiring C.S.  I really like this form of poem..

Answer 2

I thought the standard was fourteen words,  But I like your construction, the two verses and their interplay. It's a very good write!  Love returns with breathless hope.

Answer 3

Ya did good.

Answer 4

I have been in tears most of this evening. No particular reason for it, just missing my boy. This is WONDERFUL!

Thank you, fellow M.o.M.

Answer 5

It's short and sweet. Good job. I've yet to post a trigee. I think I'm afraid of messing it all up. lol

Answer 6

Nice clean cut.

Answer 7

stupid.........retarded

constipated.........stupid thoughts

bugs.........this is a stupid poem

you wrote......I critiqued