Would you read a book that...?

Question

Would you read a story that had a summary like this.

What do you get when your a girl from a broken family saved by a mysterious beauty. You get many vanishing people and a longing to be reunited with your father.

What you don't know you get is a man following you and not leaving your dreams alone.

Jamie Peddle is a girl from a broken family who is trying to make her life normal for once. Trying to fix it but also making the world disappear before her.

The Vanishing.

Answer 1

Maybe. The summary isn't very detailed so its kinda hard to tell. When I read such a tiny summary like that I usually look at the cover to decide weather I read it or not, even though there's that whole don't judge a book by its cover thing.

Answer 2

Yeah, depending on the cover. I can imagine a girl walking into a "tunnel" of trees with mist around her, and her looking over her shoulder.

Instead of putting:

What do you get when your a girl from a broken family saved by a mysterious beauty. You get many vanishing people and a longing to be reunited with your father.

What you don't know you get is a man following you and not leaving your dreams alone.

Jamie Peddle is a girl from a broken family who is trying to make her life normal for once. Trying to fix it but also making the world disappear before her.

The Vanishing.

Put:

You are a girl from a broken family. Feeling dead and alive, you  drag yourself anxiously through the days. One day, you are saved by a mysterious beauty that captures everything you beleive in and twists it into a contorted shape you are not familiar with. But people are dissapearing, and your town/city is falling apart. Suddenly, you want to see your father again.

What you don't know is that you are being followed by a man lurking in the shadows and not leaving your dreams alone.

Jamie Peddle is in such a situation. Jamie is trying to make her life normal for once, but making damages that cannot be undone. Jamie is making the world dissappear before her very eyes.

The Vanishing.

I hope i helped.

This took me forever!

I tried to make it a little more "deep".

Best answer?

Please?

Answer 3

I'd read it.... maybe.... The first few pages are what I look at to see if I want to keep reading or not... (um, check your grammar too...)

Answer 4

It has an interesting plot, and

the suspense would keep me

reading.

However, It needs editing.

Keep writing.

Answer 5

It sounds really interesting. I just don't think it would capture MY attention, but I'm sure there are a ton of other people who would read it.  

Answer 6

The summary really didn't tell me much. What do you mean saved by a mysterious beauty? It looks okay, but its not a read-it-or-i'll-die-book.

Also the last line "Trying to fix it but also making the world disappear before her" doesn't really make any sense.

Why not start off with

"Jamie Peddle is a girl from a broken family, who is for once trying to make her life normal. She longs to be reunited with her father, and is trying relentlessly to get away from a man who won't leave her or her dreams alone."

then add a little more to that.

you need more information than that.

try to make your sentences have bigger words, and check your grammar. read over it a couple of times.

email me when you fix it.

i'm interested to see what you come up with.  

Answer 7

i wouldnt grabbed and buy it.

id read the first chapter at the store and if i like it then read it. but it'd porbably catch my attention

Answer 8

Don't listen to the people criticizing you it sounds really interesting:)

good luck and I hope I get to read it some time :)

Answer 9

I doubt I would read a book that has such mistakes in the summary of it.

Edit:

The edited summary sounds a 100 times better and more interesting.

Answer 10

i SUCK at writing blurbs...but this one sounds a bit convoluted.

WHY would i get a "longing to be reunited with [my] father"?

i'd stress the disappearing people and the broken family...and "a man following you and not leaving your dreams alone" might work better as: a STALKER who turns dreams into nightmares---but that's only a suggestion since i don't know what the book is about.

Answer 11

Wow...one word?

BREATHTAKING.

it sounds in my head like one of those suspense filled totally horror deprived films.Add a dash of romance and I'm all for it!

Hah!

Answer 12

I would read it if it wasn't written by you, because no offense but I can tell you dont have a clue about grammar