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Would you read and comment on "The Spindle," a tale of woe?

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Now penitent at river's edge

Half way along a dead end street

There waits a soul behind his hedge

Whose days are but the winding-sheet

That gather, as in Passiontide,

What Time and Fate could not elide

And reckon there, in interpledge,

The toll of dreams now obsolete.

In brighter days of sunlit skies

He'd schemed, and dreamed of ripe renown

And plotted his path penny-wise

To breach the boundaries of the town

That all the world might know his name

And in the radiance of his flame

Know all his sight transmogrifies --

And then his dreams would tumble down.

A mind so keen and resolute

Seemed guaranteed its treasured goal,

But Destiny's forbidden fruit

Grew dark beside the wassail bowl

And so instead perfection's fool

Does penance on his ducking stool

And waits, a latter-day Canute,

For tides to turn on sandy shoal.

His blessed dream was but to teach

The majesty of Euclid's mind

But passion made him overreach

And thus repel those disinclined

To plumb in thoughts uncircumcised

Malignancies to be dispised;

But time and tide could not impeach

One disillusioned, left behind.

And so he traveled here and there

To share the shimmering of his grace

And then, in dark, the solitaire

Would twisted trails of doubt retrace

And find, in Saturn's harvest home,

The scythe, that like a metronome,

Would mark, for it could not repair,

What Atropos would soon erase.

And in the tumbling of Time's sands

Their reigned two sorts of gravity,

In marching spectral second hands

A chastening indignity --

And there can be no recompense

For debtors of improvidence

Whose tapestries' neat wefted strands

Ensnare all petty vanity.

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  1. I like it!

    What do you think of mine?

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  2. You have given me at least 2 weeks worth of frequent musing on this gem.  Dreams and idealism go by the boards for most of us, I think.

    But they never die and resurface when we least expect them, at least this has been my experience.  I'm no Pollyanna, but I have trouble staying disillusioned too long.  Something always comes along to cure it, if only for the moment. Such as this poem.  Thank you.

  3. It reads, as all your recent postings do, like an epic from a previous age.Are you absolutely sure you are not a reincarnation of Milton or one of his ilk?

    Unfortunately, this doesn't appeal to me as much as your other recent postings, mainly because of its length (we modern readers of poetry lead busy lives and want instant gratification) but also because it seemed to be leading towards - something - and the something didn't materialise.

    As a piece of poetry it is beautifully contructed - the rhymes aren't forced and it speaks of much sweat and tears in the maintenance of the exact beat in each line....but, I have read this over several times and cannot understand what 'message' you are trying to convey.....over-reaching ambition?  fate dealing inescapable blows?

    Well, I can't like 'em all - but I do take my hat off to your poetic skills.



      

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