Would you read this? Honestly!!!?

Question

Jack Smith awoke with a start. He could hear sirens but it wasn’t only in his dream. The streets of New York were alive and he was just one man added to the mess in a back ally. Closing his eyes, he tried to shake the image away from the inside of his eyelids. His mother weeping, fire fighters and police men everywhere, all he could do was stare as an ambulance blared its sirens and took his father away for good.

if my story startes out like that... would you want to read more of it?

Be honest.. and give be constuctive critisism.. dont be mean. Just give suggestions of what i could change or ideas of what would make it more interesting.

Thanks...

Answer 1

oh yea. very interesting. email me the rest?

Answer 2

Bravo, your fourteen just like me I've writen a few in my day and Yours is very good Write more, who knows some day you might be on amazon for selling grate books

Send me wrest tlak to yah

Answer 3

Um. Depends. If it is an action book (like The Outsiders) I would read it. If it is a historical-fiction book, I wouldn't read it at all. If it is a Fantisy...Maybe!

It all depends on what the genre is.

Answer 4

Yup!! Very good starter. I wanna read more!!!

Answer 5

You're an outstanding writer for only being 14; keep it up!

Answer 6

Probably.. another 5 pages id be asleep

Answer 7

yeah i would read that! its interesting, and cause you're using short sentences and not actually saying whats going on.. its pulling the reader in!

i think you have true writing skills! and you definately know what makes a good book!

you are using descriptive techniques aswell which makes it sound really good! i have only read a paragraph but i have a feeling this whole book is going to be really worth reading!

keep it up, and good luck with writing the rest!

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