Would you read this??

Question

This is an idea I have for a story.

Its purely for fun but I was wondering if it interested anyone else.

The plot [which I'm still working on] is about a girl in an abusive relationship but can't leave her boyfriend. She moves in to this new house and while exploring the attic meets a ghost at first she is afraid but she gets to know this ghost and finds out her story.

The ghost is a girl who commited suicide after her boyfriend leaves her for another woman. They become close friends and the girl starts to pour out all her secrets to the ghost. Eventually the ghost 'takes over' the girls body living her trapped in the limbo the ghost was in. The girl has to fight in limbo to get her body back before get stuck in the after life.

Its very sketchy at the moment but I was wondering if it sounds interesting?

Thanks for any help and advice

xoxo

Answer 1

it sounds all right, reminds me a bit of tom riddles diary in harry potter, but theyre nowhere near identical so its okay.  i dont really see how the girls abusive relationship fits in with the ghost storyline, though.  im guessing (i hope...o_O) that youve never actually been in an abusive relationship, which means it might be hard to write about that part.  im thinking that it might be better just to leave that part out, unless it plays some larger role in the story.  good luck w/your story :)

oh, i forgot to write something.  i know u said that this is just a rough outline, but another plot hole u could maybe try fixing or improving is the reason why the ghost girl wants to live again.  i feel like its kind of odd that first she commits suicide, and then she takes some other poor girls life.  

sorry for all the criticism XD  once again, hope ur story goes well :]

Answer 2

wowwwww, that sounds great i would love to watch it on film.

Answer 3

this story is interesting you must complete it but I would like to tell you something about it if you permit me, it would be better" if the haunted girl makes a deal with the ghost which is that the girl would take the ghost`s revenge by trying to make the ghost`s lover falls in love with her and then she drops him and ignore him at the same time the ghost must help the girl to get rid of the abusing lover by freaking him out in order to get back to his sane mentality and if he doesnt he must leave her to live in peace and then the ghost wouldnt need to haunt her anymore". would you accept this as an opinion not more than that it may help.

Answer 4

sounds pretty interesting to me, i have a question though how does the abusive boyfriend fit? i mean does the ghost try to seduce him or scare him off or what because if i was a ghost i wouldn't want to possess a body that was constantly being beat up. good luck with the story.

Answer 5

sorry wouldnt be my kind of book. Im a bit of a coward sounds too creepy! but if thats what you want just that little bit worked on me!

Answer 6

It sounds like you have the basic idea for your story and yes it does sound good.

Your next step is to sit down and write out detailed descriptions for the girl, her boyfriend and the ghost.  Then write out a detail description of the settings in the story (especially the major ones like the attic)

Next sit down and plot out your story in a little more detail.

Once you've done that you'll find it a lot easier to write your story.

Hope that helps.

Answer 7

kewl. i would read it and its sequils and the movie. (for the last two: if any)

Answer 8

Sounds Excellent! I Would Definitely Read This! Please Write It :]

Answer 9

If its for adults then I think it sounds good. for kids it would freak them out. I you write a few stories I can get you in touch with a very good friend of mine who's a publishing agent

Answer 10

That's cool, although the struggle for her body is a classic sci-fi plot point.  It sounds very interesting though, the sort of thing I might want to read.  Good luck!

Answer 11

Summer,

It's a good idea, but it would be far better if the girl who meets the ghost was not trapped in the same limbo. I would make it so the ghost now has the run of her own life using this young girl's body. This girl would now have a total personality change, and most likely not for the better.

Every now and then the young girl can think for herself. Maybe she wakes up from one of these spells at the principal's office or at the police station. Who would believe her?

Somewhere in your plot you can use this to break the bindings of the dead girl. Perhaps the help from a lost love or a true friend.

I like it. Nicely done.

PJ M