Wow, this place is active. Feedback on a poem?

Question

I still can't believe how many poetry topics and responses there are. I'll be coming here a lot more. Just wrote this today:

Silence, my heiress

Your lamb is abhorred

Your wings are the sickness

The skin reaping sword

In barren - unhallowed

Our tongues flay in vain

Shadows consuming the poor and their pain

The blood in the vein

Of the sick the and the sane

Answer 1

wow.

i really don't know what else to say. maybe add to it, if only so i can read more.

i love the imagery and how it sounds almost prophetic of where things are headed from our current state.

"our tounges flay in vain" amazing line, nothing we say will change anything, unless we get up and start changing it... maybe not quite what it's meant to say in context, but that's what i get from it.

thank you for sharing.

Answer 2

Very nicely put, enjoyed it write some more!!! Cheers !!!