Writing a convincing email?

Question

I want to be DekaPink for Touksou Sentai Dekaranger, Instead of a Cup Of Hot Chocolate. Here is what I have so far:

"Hi, I saw this item on eBay and thought you might be interested.

I have decided ,and am 110% SURE, that I do not wanna be a cup of hot chocolate for Halloween, but instead DekaPink. I will work out WHATEVER deal you want. PLEASE!

http://cgi.ebay.com/ws/eBayISAPI.dll?ViewItem&item=360073841401

^^ Is the morpher/SPD License"

I really need to convince my mom to buy this for me. What do you guys think can be added/changed? This IS on my b-day wishlist. My birth day is Thursday.

Answer 1

wth are you talking about?

Answer 2

huhhhhh???????

Answer 3

You want to write a convincing e-mail to your mom to get this for your birthday? Is that what you are trying to say?

Why don't you just tell her that is what you would like? That is what most kids do.  

Answer 4

huh?

Answer 5

I looked it up and I had rather be DekaPink than a cup of hot chocolate too.

How old are you? Are you a responsible young lady that helps your mom and does well in school?

Maybe it is an issue of money. With the DekaPink costume you won't be able to see  your face, would this be an issue with your mom?

Make sure you have a valid arguement. List the reasons you want one instead of the other. Don't just say "because I like it better".

I would not say "whatever deal you want".  You may see something else you like in the future and it may be more important to you. If you make a big deal of small things , she won't be as willing to listen to you about the big things.

Good luck to you!