Wrote a song how do you like it people called Good Bye?

Question

We were great friends but now your gone you left me with something that makes me wanna never forget but I have to I have to you were there and then you left you are gone in the mist I cant see you anymore you left me with a broken heart and now all I wanna say is leave leave now go I don’t wanna see anymore, when you did me wrong you broke my heart and now leave now go walk outa my life I wanna forget now go go gooo I need you to leave you make me cry and I don’t like it now leave me in my own life, I got a great life to depend on and your just standing in the way you need to go leave me now I need you gone before I cry again for remembering how you did to me wrong, and all I wish is that you would just forgive me I don’t know what I did but I said sorry anyway you should accept that now your gone your in the mist good bye.

*Chorus*

You did me wrong you need to go I need to forget and now your walkin out of the door and now your gone good bye, all I have is what you told me when I left and I will never forget.

Never come back you just make me sad it crushes me what u did to me that was wrong and now go go gooo.

*Chorus*

Good bye Good bye Good bye.

Answer 1

Man, you should be heading to Nashville USA > you have yourself a country song on your hands.  They really go for those sad & downhearted songs > and yours is pretty depressing I must say.

Now, you next need to put a melody with the words> something that has a bit of a twang to it.  

Oh, & don't forget to get yourself one of them thar copyrights too> otherwise some hillbilly is goin steal it & claim it.  

Answer 2

It is impossible to judge a song without the music.

It is also difficult to judge when it is in blank verse as most songs have some kind of rhyme and rhythm.

You do have the sentiment. Keep at it if you really want to be a song writer.