Yay another poem from comatose =]?

Question

i got tired of writing happy-go-lucky stuff so decided 2 write somethin w/ my old skwl style!

the darkness falls like rain

and echos through the house

the melodic cries of pain

are quiet as a mouse

her teddy bear is voiceless

hes musky old and frail

but she got it from her daddy

he sent it in the mail

his eyes have fallen out

and his arms dont hang quite right

the perfect picture of innocence

you'd tremble at the sight

her demons seem to laugh

at her life so berlesque

but her sorry is so vast

and her love is so grotesque

her teddy used 2 speak

but it has long been dead

it used 2 sing and dance

but now lays motionless instead

she forgot how to sing

when her teddy bear died

now she only whispers

and screams sometimes

she doesnt understand

why things are the way they are

she doesnt even remember

how she got so many scars

but she clings to the promise

her daddy long ago made

he promised to see her

again one more day.

Answer 1

It is different i found it funny

Answer 2

I like it!

Answer 3

"Hi!"

Its a sad poem that I don't find funny. But all and all for a poem it was written good.

Cheers.   : )

Answer 4

I like it :) This is bloody fantastic! You have a rare talent. Oh my, this is just so evocative!