Yes OR No to this poem.. I need your help?

Question

you took my heart,

You Ripped it out,

I trusted you with it but what do you do?

You rip it in half then give it back,

I cant fix the damage youve caused there is far too much,

The pain will be there no matter the thought,

You will never love me bacause I will never love you after all the sh** you put me through

Answer 1

In the middle...it is good...but it doesn't really have a rhythm, and it sort of is just saying stuff straight out...maybe add some similes or metaphors?

Answer 2

you took my heart,

You Ripped it out,

I trusted you with it

but what do you do?

You rip it in half

'n then give it back,

I cant fix the damage youve caused

there is far too much,

The pain will be there

no matter the thought,

You will never love me

'cause I will never love you

after all the sh** you put me through

Hope it helps!

make it like a song, and see if it floos, good!

;)

Answer 3

Sounds good to me, if that's how you feel.

However, I think you have let someone own your emotions.

And take control. ...

How about....

You took my heart,

you ripped it out.

But a new one has grown,

and although I'm alone.

I have learned

that My heart is my own.

Answer 4

yes

Answer 5

Emo c**p. Sorry, that's a no.

Answer 6

I am sorry forgive me it was not you I ripped in half but my faith in me.

Answer 7

Yours dosnt have too much of a rythm its kinda blahh

if you had to go with anything I would go with Lola's. who also answered your question.