Yesterday, when I loved you?

Question

Yesterday, when I loved you

At least I guessed I did

Waiting for a train that never came

Hearing a call when you didn't call my name

Hoping you'd learn

That you might realise I felt that

Yours was the song that my heart sung

If only you loved me when I was young

Yesterday, when I loved you

I did my monolgue for the class and you passed me

Did you pause and stare?

Did you know I looked, or did you even care?

Yesterday was when I loved you

And that yesterday passed

Yesterday was 20 years ago

So why is my heart still yours though?

Answer 1

Lovely is the "perfect" word for itChange the last line to rhyme with the one above it. Try and shorten it into a sonnet as it a poem about love.

Answer 2

In the quiet words of the virgin Mary,

come again

Answer 3

wow! that was nice. i wrote a poem in this place too. lol.

Answer 4

Great job and it seems tobe somewhat personal , is it or were h=you just taking a poetic license to write your poem .

I give it an A+

Answer 5

i rly like it, its not boring, i kept on reading it n i can relate in a way

Answer 6

The reader might not agree with the sentiments expressed here (as the guy said, there are plenty more fish in the sea) but there's no denying the genuine emotion, convincingly expressed.

Just one technical suggestion: I think the rhyming couplet should be placed at the beginning of each stanza rather than the end, as it's in the past that the meaningful feeling resides. I hope that made sense!

Answer 7

I love the story behind the poem!

It's really good but I suggest just changing it a little. Not so much so it rhymes but just so there is a rhythm.

Its really good and it was probably only me who struggled in reading it sometimes.

I think it's really good and I love how the last verse well even the last few lines changed my whole thoughts of the poems completley. Its like leaving the reader on the edge.

I also believe it is similar to Lucie Silvas' Forget Me Not

Forget me not, I ask of you

Wherever your life takes you to

And if we never meet again

Think of me every now and then

We had just one day to recall

Now all I want is something more

Than just a fading memory

Left wondering what could have been.

Isn't it a shame, that when timing's all wrong

You're doing what you never meant to,

There's always something that prevents you.

Well I believe in fate, it had to happen this way

But it always leaves me wondering whether...

In another life we'd be together.

We should feel lucky we can say... we've always got yesterday

And as I leave it all behind

You're still emblazoned in my mind

And for that very special day

Nobody loved me in that way

Forget me not, I ask of you

Wherever your life takes you to

And if we never meet again

Think of me every now and then

She writes about someone she loves but who doesn't really love her back anymore. And she hopes that they will still remember her even though they arent together. I love how the song allows you to think she could be talking about someone who has died and she hopes they don't forget her in heaven or on the other hand, someone she has split up from in a relationship.

Hope I've helped.

I loved that poem!

Well Done

Answer 8

i love it.

<3

Answer 9

That's really beautiful...I can really relate. I think that you could have that published!  I really like the whole last verse and  how it says:

Waiting for a train that never came

Hearing a call when you didn't call my name

and then,

Did you pause and stare?

Did you know I looked, or did you even care?

I loved it!

Answer 10

yesterday when i loved you

my heart would beat so fast

but tomorrow is another day

so lets see if it lasts.

Answer 11

you know how you watch american idol and there are those type of people that go on and on about how they can sing and they have been singing since they were 2 or something. Then they get up there and they are really bad and its very painful to watch because they think they are good?

kinda like that

Answer 12

OMG that is so cute. i love it. you just pretty much just said everything i couldnt tell myself or didnt know how. thats so amazing.

Answer 13

Beautiful~

Answer 14

So why is my heart still yours though?

WOW, is that a super ego?

Life goes on sweety. There are plenty of fish in the sea....

Answer 15

Yesterday when I loved you

As I read this poem

I was thinking that second line

should have been

or at least I thought I did

Because you were waiting for a train that never came

In other words you were lied to

Then the lines yesterday when I loved  you

yesterday passed

I heard of yesterday taking years

like 20 years ago

Your heart is still his because you never got over him

The title for this poem is perfect

The second paragraph said

hoping your'd learn

if he only loved you when you and him were younger instead of waiting 20 years.

Answer 16

Yesterday, when I loved you ?

i always waited for that train

that never appeared

never came ?

you sold your love

to someone elses trove

who held you as a dove

love in hand

love in glove

well love is tough

when your not good enough

while i sit at home

contemplating

what went wrong

with my pet frog

sitting on a log

later i think I"II go for a swim

with my dog ?

he"s looking pretty tired

pretty bored